Choose a block of your writing—past or present—and walk us through its revision journey. What worked? What didn’t? What did you learn in the process?
Perhaps the most important thing I've learnt over the 4 books that constitute my fiction-writing journey, is how to self-edit out my tendency to insert large infodumps of history, culture and setting into my books. Instead, I now slice the historical and setting details into chunks, and try to find places where I can insert them into different parts of the story in a way that seems natural, and helps to advance the plot, or illustrate something about my main characters - so that my readers imbibe information without feeling bored, or like they're in a classroom listening to a lecture.
The best illustration I can think of is this passage below, from the original draft of The Bangalore Detectives Club. Here's a paragraph from the original version I sold, which my editors then took up
As you can see, this is an - ahem - overly ecological paragraph, inserted right in the middle of a mystery. My editor very rightly pointed this out to me, saying
Wow – this is a stunning description of the local wildlife, but
sadly I do think this is one of those overly long descriptive sections that
could do with being cut down slightly.
Kaveri was resting
her sore feet in a bucket of hot water, when she heard the gate open. Ramu had
come home early. She tried to jump out, but her sari got caught in the bucket.
By the time she disentangled herself from the bucket, and stepped out, Ramu was
in the compound, alighting from the car. He turned to her, impassive as ever,
though she saw the sides of his mouth twitching. Kaveri murmured a hasty
apology as she fled to the garden, with the bucket in tow. Just as she reached
the papaya plant, Ramu called “Careful, Kaveri. Don’t cook the papaya plant.
The water must be hot.”
She could
definitely see his face twitching. Kaveri gave up, and began to laugh, wringing
the moisture from the folds of her sari at her feet. Ramu smiled back, asking
her “Did you sprain your leg?”
“It’s a long
story” replied Kaveri. “Let me get you your coffee and then I can tell you the
details.”
Narsamma got up
and gestured to them. They followed her to the back of the house, past a dark
corridor, and entered the back garden. The kitchen garden at the back was very
different from the sumptuous, lush bower in the front. Here, the layout was
prosaic, as befitting a frugal housewife. Banana and papaya plants, weighed
down with fruit, neatly lined the compound wall. In the corner, a drumstick
tree stood tall, pods hanging from it. A vegetable patch was in a corner, next
to a karabevu tree.
Mala hailed them
as they left. She passed over a bundle of drumstick pods, neatly tied with
twine, to each woman.
“From my garden”,
she said shyly. And hesitated.
“Plants have no
caste or community. I hope you can accept this.”
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